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Clement Charles's avatar

Oh, I love this!

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Colin Durrant's avatar

Thanks @Clement Charles :-)

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Doreen's avatar

Beautiful read

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Colin Durrant's avatar

Thanks Doreen. Appreciate it :-)

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Colin Durrant's avatar

Appreciate all the shares, thank you :-) Truly grateful for the support.

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Colin Durrant's avatar

Thank you so much for sharing Kyen and Sandra :-)

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The Ignorant Ninja's avatar

FYI just as some advice to improve your writing:

People didn't actually live in caves in ancient times. What happened was since caves protect evidence well, most of the early anthropological evidence of 'cavemen' were found in caves, which led early anthropologists to refer to our ancestors as cavemen. Later they found that actually, 99.9999% of early humans did not live in caves. It would be like claiming that modern humans live in tree forts because you found one single tree fort in your neighbors yard.

This is just a holdover from the public school system we were raised in. I was told the same thing.

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Colin Durrant's avatar

Except of course I get all my information from my channel and not from any anthropologist.

Also bear in mind that this story is about saving people’s lives by getting them to understand more about depression.

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The Ignorant Ninja's avatar

What I'm saying is that a good way to increase the quality of your writing is to fortify it with factual information. The more you know about a topic, the more you can pepper it with observations to keep the readers attention. It helps bring a level of emersion to your writing because it reverberates more strongly.

One of my favourite fantasy authors *is* an anthropologist and what makes the series so good is that he's able to merge things like magic and mythology with a realistic depiction of what things like ancient wars and cities actually were like.

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Colin Durrant's avatar

Thank you, I am grateful for your thoughtfulness to help me. I wrote a book called Billion Dollar Hack. The story was fictional but everything else was fact. The places, a lot of the hacking incidents and I even worked out the actual time it takes to travel between places :-)

https://www.amazon.co.uk/Billion-Dollar-Hack-Technological-Thriller-ebook/dp/B0BTMF6WJ5/

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